Before & After
Real examples from real document types. Each sample shows the original text, the revised version, and the specific changes made — so you can see exactly how we work.
Issue: Unnatural phrasing and missing articles throughout setup instructions
"Before first use, please to wash the kettle interior with clean water. Fill water to the MAX line and boil one time. Pour out the water and kettle is ready for use."
"Before first use, rinse the inside of the kettle with clean water. Fill to the MAX line and bring to a boil. Discard the water — the kettle is now ready to use."
Issue: Ambiguous hazard warnings and incorrect signal word usage
"ATTENTION: Do not use the drill in wet environment or near flammable materials. Serious injury or death may happen. Always wearing eye protection when operating."
"WARNING: Do not use this drill in wet conditions or near flammable materials. Failure to follow this warning may result in serious injury or death. Always wear eye protection while operating."
Issue: Awkward dosage instructions and non-standard storage language
"Take 1 capsule daily with meal or as directed by your healthcare practitioner. Do not exceed recommended dosage. Store in cool dry place away from direct sunlight. Keep from children."
"Take 1 capsule daily with a meal, or as directed by your healthcare provider. Do not exceed the recommended dosage. Store in a cool, dry place away from direct sunlight. Keep out of reach of children."
Issue: Non-standard unit formatting and awkward feature descriptions
"The compressor is applicable for use in working pressure of 8bar maximum. Motor power is 2.2KW. Noise level not exceeding 72dB(A). Suitable for continuous working in temperature of 5°C~40°C."
"Maximum working pressure: 116 PSI (8 bar). Motor power: 2.2 kW. Noise level: ≤72 dB(A). Rated for continuous operation in ambient temperatures of 41°F–104°F (5°C–40°C)."
Issue: Feature bullets read as translated rather than written for American consumers
"Superior sound quality with advanced acoustic technology Long battery life up to 8 hours continuous playing IPX5 waterproof, suitable for sport using Easy pairing with all Bluetooth devices Comfortable wearing for long time use"
"Premium sound powered by advanced acoustic drivers Up to 8 hours of continuous playback per charge IPX5 water resistance — built for workouts Instant pairing with all Bluetooth-enabled devices Ergonomic fit designed for all-day comfort"
Issue: Warranty terms use non-standard constructions and unclear claim procedure
"This product is warranted against defects in materials and workmanship for period of one (1) year from date of original purchase. Warranty is void if damage caused by improper using, accident, or unauthorized modification. For warranty service, please contact to our customer service department."
"This product is warranted against defects in materials and workmanship for a period of one (1) year from the date of original purchase. This warranty does not cover damage caused by misuse, accident, or unauthorized modification. To request warranty service, contact our customer service department."
Issue: Troubleshooting section uses confusing conditional structure
"If the robot is not working, please check below situations: 1. Battery is low, please charge. 2. Dustbin is full, please empty. 3. Brush is tangled with hair, please clean. 4. Robot is stuck, please move to open area and restart."
"If the robot is not working, check the following: 1. Low battery — charge the robot before use. 2. Full dustbin — empty the dustbin and replace it. 3. Tangled brush — remove hair and debris from the brush roll. 4. Robot is stuck — move it to an open area and restart."
Issue: Critical fire safety warning is buried and uses weak language
"Note: The heater should not be placed near curtains, bedding, or other flammable items. It is suggested to keep 3 feet distance from combustible materials. Do not leave heater unattended for long time."
"WARNING: Keep this heater at least 3 feet away from curtains, bedding, and all other flammable materials. Never leave the heater unattended while in operation."
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